Barren
Stretched out
Naked
and
ReachingAbortion
due to seasonUnclothed,
Anticipating the embrace,
The white, crystal cloak
soon to bare over…
Blistering winds
do shake the buds,
Your ovaries
left
in cryogenic sleep,yet
the
beauty
of your form
the
intricacies
of your fingers
the
vulgarity
in your structure…Imagery savored in pixels
Your nakedness
relished
till yet another season…
dangโฆthe hard and soft in thisโฆthe beauty of the form, but vulgarities of structureโฆthe abortion line popped meโฆvery intriguing verse.
The barren and beautiful play well together….very much the season…
hope you having a great weekend!
Thanks Brian! ๐
I hope you have a fabulous weekend yourself. Thanks once again for the challenge!
wow, strong words, excellent work.
“Abortion
due to season”
… i could quote the whole poem! very nicely done!
I am glad you like it… ๐
Thank you Nephiriel!
Abortion to the season line struck me too ~
I dread winter in my part of the world but admire the beauty of those naked trees ~
๐ Thank you for your comment!
I was referring to the loss of the leaves due to the coming winter ๐
I hope I didn’t offend anyone!
Great job, beautiful one! I’m so glad you are getting to write!
Thanks Debbie ๐
I am glad you explained your use of the word ‘abortion.’ From your words and some of the other comments I thought it referred to something else. One definitely can see the structure of trees easier without leaves, and as Grace said there is beauty in this nakedness.
Thanks for your comment Mary. but that’s the wonderful thing about poetry.. the many interpretations of…
A very strong, bold write. The same lines stuck with me. What impressed me most was that the word choices seemed natural, not force, or looked up. It really read like I was hearing from you; authentic.
I am glad you feel this way. Thank you for stopping by ๐
The art as metaphor, the human condition as counter-metaphor – the freeze, the thaw, the season all so uniquely told – quite post modern, I believe!
Thank you Gay! I’m truly appreciate your comment ๐
Stunning, so much within this that makes me want to read it again and again… a very original touch that leaves me in awe…magic!
Aww, I appreciate your comment pandamoniumcat! So glad you stopped by ๐
Provocative, and clever – thought it was doctor’s white coats at first….but suddenly I got it….and vulgarity, yes, for sure…..thanks for this well-thought out testament..
Thank you for reading it Captain … glad I could share it with you all ๐
It sounds so hard, raw, and yet, it is exactly how life, birth and death is. Yes, I agree with them … Stunning!
I am glad you find an interpretation in my piece.
Peace! ๐
Undressed, strong and bold.
๐ Thank you!
You are fantastically talented, a joy to read you!
Awww Anna I am honored by your comment.
Thanks a lots dear ๐
Intense writing and all so visually thrilling. ๐
Thanks my very own Neo ๐
๐ ๐ You’re so very welcome.
Wow… your use of words really peeks my interest! This is a very powerful poem!
I am grateful as it only comes from the Most High ๐
Cheers! ๐
Intriguing, intense, vivid ๐
Thank you ๐
Wow, the death of it, stripped down and beautiful…intense. Great piece.
O thank you kindly Poet Laundry ๐
Ravishingly provocative. Heavy and powerful words, Nicely FK!
Hank
O thank you Hank. I’m glad you stopped by ๐
Clever use of non romantic words and imagery to describe autumn
Thanks ๐
I enjoyed that — not just dark, but hopeful with bright images mixed. Most folks made this totally dark
Glad you appreciate it Sabio Lantz ๐
You created sensuality in a bre tree – wonderful.
I am happy you see it that way and give all glory to the Most High ๐
The comparison is apt. Some painters “see” the nude beneath the dress and some landscape artists prefer to paint their trees in winter when the structure is revealed.
it is a wonderful picture, which sadly I cannot take the credit for… SueAnn is the photographer and her piece only inspired my words ๐
Thanks for stopping by and commenting though.
Cheers! ๐
Intriguing and wonderful verses…and what an honor that you used one of my pics. thank you so much!!
hugs
sueann
O the honor is all mine SueAnn! You are wonderfully talented and I am more than glad to have one of your pieces on my blog ๐