Before we lost our wings

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Laughing angels dancing round burn fires
Drenched with youthful spirit and innocence
Life is a dream, in our small frames once lived

Imagination fueled young desires
Cowboys ‘n’ Indians, we played in pretense
By day-dream’s Never-land we are captive

Boisterous as chirping birds on a wire
Love and friendship we share in transparence
Being naughty or nice without motive

Trampoline jumping, higher and higher
Skirts raise and the boys stare with pure essence
“Girls wear weird shorts”-   minds still uncorruptive

That age, care-free will I always admire
Day-dreams, laughs, tears…  flickers from burn fires

Its about  Trireme Sonnet tonight on dVerse and we have Samuel Peralta taking us through the motions 🙂

The Sonnet consists of four tercets (with rhyme scheme ABC-ABC-ABC-ABC), followed by a heroic couplet (with rhyme taken from one of the above tercet lines, AA, or BB, or CC).

Read more about it here: Form for All: On Midwinter, Magic Realism, and a Trireme SonnetPlease feel free to join us at the bar 🙂

Cheerio! 😉


30 comments on “Before we lost our wings

  1. very nice…the elements you use are playful…and bring back childhood…the tramp…we used to jump on one…had a cousin break his arm on one…ha…cowboys n indians of course…ha….yeah a little more innocence back then too…smiles….very cool use of the form…

  2. Fantastic playful image of those days we will always admire.
    BTW, no “t” in “drenched”, also, it is “transparence”. Or maybe you did that intentionally.

  3. This definitely brings back a lot of memories – Neverland, Cowboys-and-Indians, trampolines – in a composition that owes much of its sense of innocence and freedom to the traditionality and subtle rhyme scheme of the Trireme Sonnet. Wonderfully done.

  4. nice…childhood is such a magical time…smiled at being naughty or nice without motive.. sometimes i want to have back that immediacy of a child

  5. Cowboys and Indians – we did that too, surprising seeing as the UK never really had either! I love the playful tone you’ve maintained through this poem, which so effectively disguises the form.

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